QUOTE (MorriganAensland @ Jun 21 2009, 02:37 AM)
This was a fun chapter. Self-contained and with a fairly basic plot, but it let character interactions really take center stage. There was all this humerous bickering and talking which helped flesh out the characters (Faragonda and Griffon, right? It's been a while since I've read this and I just wanted to be sure), and of course...
INTERNET PIRACY!!!! Oh, how I love your noble -admittedly unintended- defense of the practice and please excuse me while I heap the kudos on you. ^_^
Thank you. ^^
I wanted to use this chapter to mainly develop their characters a little bit more; the next chapter will be a more descriptive one,
about what happened at the ball.The other character (Faye) is not Griffin though (
I plan to wait a while before bringing Griffin into the story, because there's a slightly complicated history between Griffin and Fara), she's an OC of mine.
Lol, and the piracy part was unintended, at first. I realized it later, while writing the rest of the chapter, but decided to keep it anyway. (And I can't help but be a fan of internet piracy, because
nothing (music, movies, TV shows) ever releases on time here in India, and so piracy is instinctive and natural, for me, lol...)
QUOTE (Another Morning @ Jun 21 2009, 09:58 AM)
YAY new chapter!
I really liked this one, it was funny but also showed what kind of relationship Faye and Fara have. I also liked that you included little bits about how the characters looked. It's bad form to get too descriptive, but I like at least knowing the basics, and you did that well.
I'm excited for chapter 3 ^^
Thanks!
I took esca and Humbu's advice, and decided to make my story a bit more descriptive, but I wasn't sure if I downplayed the description a little too much. I'm glad you think what I wrote was enough, for the time being. ^^
This post has been edited by Jahnavi: Jun 21 2009, 9:19 AM