my novel Options

[alicia_musa]

hey everyone upon my role-play of a zombie apocalypse i am writing a novel about one. using different people. here is chapter one
"mom. mom? mom answer me!" i just sat there. waiting for my mom to wake up. finally she made a mumble noise. i sall her eyes they were the eyes of death. i took my sword and said "sorry mom." and with that her had came off. i ran to the window, opened the blinds and looked out. nothing to see only the woods and a couple of zombies. "mark!" i ran out of the room. he was shooting them with arrows.
he looked at me and told me "look in the closet i don't think im running out any time soon." and sure enough he was right. there were bags and bags of arrows. "we should get going." i told him. i turned around and went into the kitchen. i opened the fridge and all my dads beer fell making a loud noise. "what happened." my brother said running down the stairs falling on his face. i ran over to help him.
"no i don't need help but we both need it." he pointed to the radio and jumped up. i ran to the radio and turned it on. "hello. please do not go near the city. there are allot of zombies and you don't want to lose any of your group." i hung up the radio but did not turn it off. "brother we should-" i looked around and i did not see him. then he jumped behind me and scared the **** out of me. "lets get our stuff together and get out of here.


(on paper it is 2 pages long by the way)

[DeadInside]

Well, i used to play Darkstalkers a lot back then, yet my favorite 2d fighting game will always be KOF98

Anyway... back on topic.
I don't know.... My opinion was like I said not knowing how people used to work in here and I know Im very good on blowing someone's card castles down when i try to help LOL (reason i almost never post my critic/opinion on fan arts or thinks like this) so, i hope this improve and continue and not get thrown away...